Saturday, October 4, 2014
DUE OCTOBER 9 [and don't forget the poll]
Read the assignment for today on the homepage: COMPARE THE QUALITY OF ONE OF THE EXAMPLES TO YOUR WORK IN GENERAL.
DID YOU LEARN ANYTHING VALUABLE?
PICK a passage that has not yet been chosen and WRITE A COMMENT according to the assignment's directions.
There are 10 passages: that means that the first 10 people will each choose a different one. The second 10 people will start over; and so the 3rd 10 people.
(When you write a comment, start with your comment's number -- if you are the first person or the second etc. Then CLEARLY INDICATE THE NUMBER OF YOUR CHOSEN PASSAGE.)
SKIP THE USUAL "I AGREE" "I DISAGREE". It is irrelevant. Look at the quality of argument and the quality of style in supporting the arguments. WRITE COMPLETE SENTENCES not fragments. REVIEW before you click "send".
Feel free to engage each other with replies etc.
One task of next week's writing assignment will be to copy-and-paste your comment (for grade.)
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I use a lot of “fluff” in my writing. I usually like to lead my reader on for a while before I actually get to the point. Sometimes this is done intentionally but other times I just cannot help it, I am a lengthy writer. I like my writing to show progression, almost a storyline which I feel accurately portrays how I think and how I speak in real life. I like to make my points only after a long introduction, and when I do make my point, I like to make it very detailed. I chose passage 9 because we basically had the same note taking techniques but her way of describing it was straighter to point than mine was. It was short and sweet but still very detailed which is something I seldom ever do. I also enjoyed the writing style and the fluidity of the passage; the writer was self-aware and it made it interesting.
ReplyDeletethe passage that I chose was passage 1, I chose this because his views on written text compare to moving images were similar to mine in a way. However the way that he approached it was straight forward and much more organized than mine was. I hope to master this technique one day so I don't have to go around the subject just to make my point.
ReplyDeleteThe passage I related to most was passage 4. In my notes I tend to write down a lot of unnessesary things although I did in fact think they were important factors. I like to see cause and effect statements through my notes. In writing I also like to know what I'm going to write before I write it. Planning out what I am trying to say is my method to writing a good response.
ReplyDeleteIn my assignments, even though I like to get straight to the point, I feel that I tend to not elaborate enough. I choose passage 2 because that student writes most like me. He/she got right to the point and used the phrase "I feel" a couple of times. I use the phrase "I feel" a lot. In my eyes, it shows the reader my expression and thoughts towards what I'm writing about. I really liked the way this author thought before she started writing. Although I think before I write, I hope to strategize more the way this author does.
ReplyDeleteI love when Ta Nehisi Coates wrote, "...I love the act of discovery, of revelation, and then the attempt to share that revelation in all its fullness and clarity." Each individual perceives one's writing in a different way. Therefore, it's so important to be precise with your words and to get your point across clearly. Ta Nehisi Coates really had me enjoy reading his article because I had "fullness and clarity" while reading it.
Comparing number 7 to mine, I tend to make my sentences considerably long, not keeping them as short as they can be. By this, I don't mean that I want to write with simple words and short sentences like Hemingway or something. I don't write like "Jim is bored. He also is hungry.", rather using "Jim is bored, and he's also hungry."
ReplyDeleteI tend to overuse commas because of this. My sentences are rarely short and simple.
I liked the way passage 6 was written. He answered the prompt, but then he presented his own questions. The questions lead you into a deeper level of thinking about unemployment. L'emigrante made it seem like being unemployed in America was the biggest struggle in the world. Then the writer of passage 6 opposed it and made you imagine what it would be like trying to survive in a foreign country without a job. In my writing I simply answer questions but nothing more. I need to add to the conversation more with my writing like the author of passage 6.
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ReplyDeleteI think on my last paper the professor wrote that I sound like an old lady. He has a point, after looking at my paper could see my writing was all over the place, like a rambling old lady. There was no organization in my paper and it took me a long time to state my case. That's what I need to start doing for my papers. I need to organize my papers better and stay on point. That is what I saw in example #10. I don’t do that with my papers and I think it’s time for a change. The writing in example 10 has the following things I need to work on; the paper has flow, the passage is easy to understand and lastly the point is made fast. And that is what I need to do with my writing make it simple, clear and to the point.
DeleteGood start. You did it here
DeletePassage 10's offering of clarity is what is the most obvious quality in the writing. The author made two prominent characteristics of Pascal and then defended those claims with clear cut examples of personal experience and examples from the boos. What I learned from that passage was to be quick and concise in writings and not fill up an assignment with fluff that is irrelevant to topic on hand.
ReplyDeleteWhen reading passage 5, I automatically felt a connection to my writing since the writer herself also migrated to the United States. I like that she mentions that she "doesn't like to play the victim" which is why she doesn't bring up her past. The author of this passage self-reflects, gets straight to the point, but also quotes the book several times to back up her statements and not make it all so opinion based. By tying the book to her own personal hardships, not only is she able to relate and associate, but she has a much better understanding of what being Pascal is like. I find it valuable for the reader to connect to the author, proving she did just that.
ReplyDeleteThe passage I related to most was number 9. The writer mentions about his/her note taking techniques. From the way it sounds, we takes notes in similar ways. To me, it is very important to include details that may seem basic or useless to other people. But these details help me to relate to the work of literature and remember what was going on. Including the characters, setting, main aspects, and the plot is always a necessity for me in note taking. The comment underneath this passage is what truly made me relate to this passage because I know my method of note taking and it works for me.
ReplyDeleteI chose passage number 10. It was my comment's number as well as my chosen passage. I like that this writer clearly showcased a personal connection to their own experiences and Pascal's. Making the connection showed understanding of the character's journey but also of their own in a way that avoided adding unnecessary details. They chose various sections and the direct moments from their own life in a way that was clear and concise.
ReplyDeleteIn the list of passages, number 11 or the last one, was mine.
I chose passage 10 because I also like to reflect myself into what I am reading. I feel it is the only way to try and connect with the characters. The difference between passage 10 and my writing is that I do not go deep enough when trying to reflect my experiences, I leave it pretty vague. With the author of #10 giving detail to every similar situation, you can see where her self reflections and the book actually meet. Sometimes it is unclear when I am trying to connect myself and the book. I also choose passage 7, I usually prefer to write less because it gets straight to the point. Although sometimes when writing little, I may grasp the point fully in my head, but in my writing it may not be as clear as it is in my head.
ReplyDeletePassage 1 really stuck out to me. I really like the way the person described how images affect your mind rather than reading it. I have the same view as this. In my assignment I wrote something similar. I believe that seeing something completely takes out the opportunity for someone to interpret something how it is not intended to be interpreted. I really like this passage. I think it's well written and explains the point a lot better than I did in my assignment.
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